Six years ago I became intensely involved in the company. I started in sales and business development and advanced to project manager and board member. After completing my MBA I will return to my family’s business to execute our expansion plan. I have already started by founding a timber company in Central America and designing a pilot for a smart fueling project in Nigeria and Ghana. My immediate next goal is to focus on growing our telecommunications department. Due to recent investments, this department has potential to serve most of Western Africa with low marginal cost. I intend on leveraging this position by leading our company into other countries, including Nigeria, Liberia and Cameroon.
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